Cot life
I peeled stars out of the sky for you
Laid them by your happy head
They sparkled at your gaze
I knitted forests with my fingers for you
And with your low chuckle
You breathed wonder into them
I sailed oceans for you
Brought you gems and colours from the deep
Your smile lit up the dark depths
With so much life breathed in and out of you
How can you grow so quiet,
Lie still, silent and pale blue?
Pearls and eyes, diamonds and smiles
Are gone from this place
I cry tears for you
AMNA AHMED
This is a remarkably sophisticated, elegant, and controlled treatment of an emotive subject. Every aspect of the language has been thought out, from the cleverly inverted title to the careful linking together of all the images in the last stanza. The poem is a wonderful example of how simple language, redrafting and forethought make a poem more fresh and moving, not less.
KATE CLANCHY
Amna Ahmed, aged 15, receives Slattern by Kate Clanchy (Chatto Windus). Submitted by Angela Yates of Haberdashers’ Aske’s School for Girls, Hertfordshire, who receives a set of Poetry Society posters with teacher’s notes. For Poetry Society events, tel: 0171 240 2133