Last September, one Year 6 boy, who always came unwillingly to school, and had a rather unusual home life, wrote: "I went out and I saw some flowers. It was windy. It was near a lake."
Eight months later, after intensive teaching, he wrote the following Level 5 poem. I have listed the work we have covered which empowered the lad to do this.
"I wandered (powerful verbs) lonely as a cloud (peronification and similes) That floats on high o'er (use of archaic language) vales and hills (noun opposites), When all at once I saw (extended sentences) a crowd, A host, (synonyms) of golden daffodils (adjectives); Beside the lake, beneath the trees (prepositions), Fluttering and dancing in the breeze (rhyme)."
Is it not amazing what these children can write in 20 minutes? Tomorrow I teach adverbs so I expect him to add examples to his poem and improve it further.
Jenny Smith 22 Dringthorpe Road York