Narrative Writing Task — AQA English Language GCSE Example Answer (A* L8 L9)

“Lake Narcissus. Summer. I used to think it was the most incredible place on Earth; on days like this — when the angry winds that whipped through the valley were still — the clear blue sky rippled off the surface of the shimmering water: a giant, serene mirror…”

Here’s a story about death vs life, thoughts vs impulses and the restorative beauty of nature. I’ve been teaching a lot of creative writing recently and yesterday my student challenged me to sit and write a story with her: so here it is! It’s suitable for students studying Narrative writing at GCSE or IGCSE level (AQA, CIE / Cambridge, WJEC / Eduqas, CCEA, OCR, Edexcel and more).

** WARNING: The content may be upsetting for some readers as it explores mental health and depression**

This is an example response to a GCSE Narrative Writing - A* L9 Full Mark Example. Written by an AQA examiner.

Warning: It does contain references to depression and mental health issues, as part of the story. I’ve added the plan to the description below so you can check whether it’s right for you and/or your students.

This digital + printable pdf resource includes the following:
THE QUESTION
‘Write a story, set in a mountainous area, as suggested by the picture in the document’
THE PLAN
1- character views the mountain lake landscape
2 - feels sad and depressed, thinks about jumping in the lake
3 - a girl appears, starts running towards the water
4 - she jumps in, he is worried that she’ll drown and jumps in after her
5 - he saves her, they sit on the shore of the lake together
THE ANSWER
WRITING TASK

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